Personal Narrative
A good personal narrative is a powerful story that the writer creates. The writer uses his or her "voice" in the text to create that unique storytelling experience that clearly defines who they are. In other words the audience of readers should know it is you because they can pick up on your personality in how the text is written. Just because you went to Knott's Berry Farm on Saturday does not mean there is a story there. Even if you had a blast. That is why you have to pick out that "small seed" moment like when your father fell out on the Calico River Rapids ride. That doesn't usually happen, right? So that's a good story right there. People would naturally want to hear more and have questions. If you end that story with an important message like, "...and that's why you are supposed to wear the lap belt," then you have a powerful ending that we can all learn from.
1) Think of a person, place, or moment in your life that matters and write a story.
A) Ask what is my story really about? Include descriptions, dialogue, and inner thinking that
convey that meaning.
2) Focus on one episode and write with detail.
3) Help readers picture the episode with the small actions of the moment.
A) Zoom in on small powerful details that capture big moments and feelings.
B) Elaborate on important scenes
C) Include new scenes:
i) Remembered from the past
ii) Imagined but necessary to help the reader understand your story better
4) Use the exact dialogue unique to each character.
A) Characters use words, phrases, and tone that show their personalities.
B) Explain why characters act the way they do.
7) Climb inside the moment and write within the narrator's point of view.
8) Craft a memorable lead to begin your narrative.
9) Craft an ending that delivers a powerful message:
A) Something you learned or you now understand better as a result of the experience
10) Be sure to write your story with your own unique voice.
11) Use the "Narrative Writing Checklist" to ask and plan your next steps as a writer.
A) Ask what is my story really about? Include descriptions, dialogue, and inner thinking that
convey that meaning.
2) Focus on one episode and write with detail.
3) Help readers picture the episode with the small actions of the moment.
A) Zoom in on small powerful details that capture big moments and feelings.
B) Elaborate on important scenes
C) Include new scenes:
i) Remembered from the past
ii) Imagined but necessary to help the reader understand your story better
4) Use the exact dialogue unique to each character.
A) Characters use words, phrases, and tone that show their personalities.
B) Explain why characters act the way they do.
7) Climb inside the moment and write within the narrator's point of view.
8) Craft a memorable lead to begin your narrative.
9) Craft an ending that delivers a powerful message:
A) Something you learned or you now understand better as a result of the experience
10) Be sure to write your story with your own unique voice.
11) Use the "Narrative Writing Checklist" to ask and plan your next steps as a writer.
Narrative Writing Checklist
The Narrative Writing Checklist (5th Grade) below can help the writer
make sure that he/she are writing a narrative essay.
make sure that he/she are writing a narrative essay.
Personal Narrative Writing Posters from Class
Using Quotations in Personal Narratives
How-to-Write Dialogue
When writing dialogue in your narratives or other fictional stories, it is important to begin a new paragraph each time the speaker changes. We start a new paragraph by hitting return and then tab one time. See the example below:
Fall is such a beautiful time of year because like most Californians we have suffered through the extreme temperatures of summer. The fall temperature is much cooler. The freshness of the air seems to be cleaner and less stuffy than the sweltering heat of summer, and some of our trees leaves start to change color in preparation for the winter months.
"I like the fall because we start a new school year," Geraldine said.
"That's true," said Niko, "but I love the fall because it is football season."
"Oh, that's right," Geraldine remembered that her mother signed her up for flag football this year at Peck Park. She was nervous about running around on the field especially when it was so hot this past summer. She asked, "Are you playing football, Niko?"
"No, I wanted too, but it was going to conflict with baseball. I told my parents that I'll just play baseball this fall."
"The team is going to miss you this year," Geraldine replied.
Niko said, "Yeah, but at least I'll still have time to play and collect some of the orange maple leaves from my front yard. Last fall I didn't get a chance to play in the collected leaves my father rakes up and I was kind of bummed about it."
"We should totally do that this year!"
"Absolutely," Niko said as he pulled his phone out of his pocket. "Let's put it in the calendar."
"I like the fall because we start a new school year," Geraldine said.
"That's true," said Niko, "but I love the fall because it is football season."
"Oh, that's right," Geraldine remembered that her mother signed her up for flag football this year at Peck Park. She was nervous about running around on the field especially when it was so hot this past summer. She asked, "Are you playing football, Niko?"
"No, I wanted too, but it was going to conflict with baseball. I told my parents that I'll just play baseball this fall."
"The team is going to miss you this year," Geraldine replied.
Niko said, "Yeah, but at least I'll still have time to play and collect some of the orange maple leaves from my front yard. Last fall I didn't get a chance to play in the collected leaves my father rakes up and I was kind of bummed about it."
"We should totally do that this year!"
"Absolutely," Niko said as he pulled his phone out of his pocket. "Let's put it in the calendar."
jacques cousteau articles
The Writing Prompt: Write a journal entry Cousteau may have recorded after he met Emile Gagnan. Use facts from the passage.
Chris Miller January 30, 2024
Writing: Informative 3-Paragraph Essay
Narrative Writing Prompt
on Jacques Cousteau
Prompt: Write a journal entry Cousteau may have recorded after he met Emile Gagnan. Use facts from the passage.
For the record… Sailors don’t journal, we keep a ship’s log!
Ship’s log. May 13, 1941. Aboard the Richelieau. Indian Ocean.
My goodness it has been so boring most of the morning. Here we are in support of the British and US Naval Forces for the war in the Pacific, but nothing exciting is happening. I guess that’s a good thing. All the men have cleaned and polished the battery and guns ready for combat but nothing comes. It’s like the doldrums have boarded, and amongst us naval officers we have exchanged books so many times that this is now my third read of Pilgrims Progress. Ugh, and it's in English too.
One of the men that works under my command is a gunsmith named Emile Gagnan, and he was telling me how he too used to swim the French Riviera as a boy out of Les Goudes just outside Marseilles. He’s sort of a little man with a hefty chin and the lightest laugh that’s quite a contradiction to what you might expect. Anyways, my new friend and I started talking about all the possibilities the seas have to offer. We talked about places we’d like to visit and little way off bays and harbors we’ve only read about in books. The sea was a passion for both of us. I told him that I had read Captain Cook’s logs of Tahitian sands kissed with the most crystal clear waters and for both of us we could clearly see in our mind’s eye the vibrant coral reefs.
I asked him if he thought we might ever be able to breathe underwater and how magical that could be. He said that he had spent many nights awake thinking about the very same thing. He said he had been working on a “regulator,” which limited the amount of gas to a small explicit amount. Perhaps we could use the same sort of system to regulate the oxygen a diver uses while underwater? He said that before the war he had been studying to become an engineer and he showed me some of the small little gadgets he had been putting together aboard the ship. One such gadget was like a jack knife but for toiletries. It functioned as a toothbrush, comb, and razor and yet not much larger than a toothbrush, and another gadget he brought out was a sort of disposable flashlight, that when the tab was pulled it gave off a very bright glow.
I am so elated to have found someone on the Richelieau who is so much like me. Emile seems like an old lost friend who knows me and understands me, and now I know we can daydream exotic beaches, old familiar salty waves along the Riviera, and invest our souls in new building adventures. He is just the man to have met to work on that apparatus for underwater breathing with me. I bet you in no time I will be walking underwater 30 feet down just as if I was walking on land.
Writing: Informative 3-Paragraph Essay
Narrative Writing Prompt
on Jacques Cousteau
Prompt: Write a journal entry Cousteau may have recorded after he met Emile Gagnan. Use facts from the passage.
For the record… Sailors don’t journal, we keep a ship’s log!
Ship’s log. May 13, 1941. Aboard the Richelieau. Indian Ocean.
My goodness it has been so boring most of the morning. Here we are in support of the British and US Naval Forces for the war in the Pacific, but nothing exciting is happening. I guess that’s a good thing. All the men have cleaned and polished the battery and guns ready for combat but nothing comes. It’s like the doldrums have boarded, and amongst us naval officers we have exchanged books so many times that this is now my third read of Pilgrims Progress. Ugh, and it's in English too.
One of the men that works under my command is a gunsmith named Emile Gagnan, and he was telling me how he too used to swim the French Riviera as a boy out of Les Goudes just outside Marseilles. He’s sort of a little man with a hefty chin and the lightest laugh that’s quite a contradiction to what you might expect. Anyways, my new friend and I started talking about all the possibilities the seas have to offer. We talked about places we’d like to visit and little way off bays and harbors we’ve only read about in books. The sea was a passion for both of us. I told him that I had read Captain Cook’s logs of Tahitian sands kissed with the most crystal clear waters and for both of us we could clearly see in our mind’s eye the vibrant coral reefs.
I asked him if he thought we might ever be able to breathe underwater and how magical that could be. He said that he had spent many nights awake thinking about the very same thing. He said he had been working on a “regulator,” which limited the amount of gas to a small explicit amount. Perhaps we could use the same sort of system to regulate the oxygen a diver uses while underwater? He said that before the war he had been studying to become an engineer and he showed me some of the small little gadgets he had been putting together aboard the ship. One such gadget was like a jack knife but for toiletries. It functioned as a toothbrush, comb, and razor and yet not much larger than a toothbrush, and another gadget he brought out was a sort of disposable flashlight, that when the tab was pulled it gave off a very bright glow.
I am so elated to have found someone on the Richelieau who is so much like me. Emile seems like an old lost friend who knows me and understands me, and now I know we can daydream exotic beaches, old familiar salty waves along the Riviera, and invest our souls in new building adventures. He is just the man to have met to work on that apparatus for underwater breathing with me. I bet you in no time I will be walking underwater 30 feet down just as if I was walking on land.
Mr. Miller's Narrative Process Example #1
ROUGH DRAFT #1 FOR CONTENT: IN THIS DRAFT, I AM LOOKING TO CHANGE SOME OF THE CONTENT TO MAKE THE STORY BETTER. AS I READ THIS DRAFT, I DECIDE ON WHAT I LIKE AND WANT TO KEEP, AND THAT WHICH DOESN'T SOUND GREAT OR TAKES THE READER AWAY FROM THE STORY.
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ROUGH DRAFT #2 FOR CHECKING GRAMMAR. I THINK THE SECOND DRAFT IS A BETTER STORY THEN ROUGH DRAFT #1. I MADE SOME SIGNIFICANT CHANGES TO IT, SO NOW BEFORE PUBLISHING MY STORY I NEED TO MAKE SURE I FOLLOW ALL THE GRAMMATICAL RULES AS BEST AS POSSIBLE.
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Notice that the Final Draft is typed and double-spaced, the font is Ariel and size 12, I have added a title to the story, included some more authentic details, checked for spelling and punctuation, and it's presented in pristine condition.
Mr. Miller's Narrative Process Example #3
ROUGH DRAFT FOR GRAMMAR AND CONTENT
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I worked on this draft on google classroom and then began to proofread my copy by hand. Interestingly, when I read the story to my own child, she said that she did not understand it. That is a big reason why I included the Author's Note at the very beginning of my final draft.
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